Recce

My Presentation Evaluation.

My presentation was a pitch for our Mockumentary. My presentation included the recce, the storyboard (for the first scene), the target audience, the main character profiles, and the treatment. The role that I played in preparing this presentation was making the main character profiles and explaining it to the class. When I got up in front of the class, I projected my voice so everyone could hear me, and I tried to use as many body and hand gestures as I could to engage people in the presentation. During the presentation I felt confident in what I was talking about, and I knew exactly what to say without looking at the script I thought I was going to need. I also interacted with the audience by asking them a question so that I could see whether or not they understood the character profiles and what they were supposed to mean. People said I was good at effectively explaining my ideas and I projected my voice so everyone could hear and understand me. The skill I was most proud of from my presentation was the fact that I spoke clearly without any mistakes and I didn’t hesitate or pause whilst explaining the character profiles. I am most proud of this because I usually can’t explain things to other people very well, and I usually use sentence fillers like “uhm, like, yeah” but I didn’t. Another skill I was pleased with was the fact that I used hand gestures when speaking. I was proud of this skill because I thought holding my book would make me forget to use hand gestures, but I still used them.one skill that I did not use as effectively was my tone of voice. This is because I didn’t change my tone of voice to emphasise my points, I just used my normal tone of voice. I should of done this because it would have been effective for the reader to listen to, and they could have been more engaged in what I was saying. To do this, I should read through the work before hand, and see which emotions I could use in my voice to explain my points.

Proposal

Company Name:  Mosby Production

Contact Details: HAB Southwark Park Road, Bermondsey SE16 3TZ

Title of show: The Only Way is Bermondsey

Type of show: Mockumentary

Purpose of show: The purpose of our show is to entertain the audience, mock the documentary format and make fun of teenagers. Teens think their life is dramatic and interesting but chances are they are a little overdramatic and maybe too exaggerated.

Synopsis: The show follows the ups and downs of teenage life in Bermondsey. We will follow the turbulent life of teenagers in a typical Bermondsey school; we follow the characters Freya, Jessica and Emily who are the normal ‘nerdy’ called kids. Then the chavy girl characters called Bobbi, Amie and Chesney. The chavy boy names are Reiss, Liam and Aiden. Come and join us as we follow the groups adventures around Bermondsey; schools days, nights out, parental arguments and friendship disputes abound The Mockumentary will show the comparisons of all the different types of characters. There’s never a dull day in the typical Bermondsey School.

Target audience: teenagers and students People who are the same age as those who are characters in the show.

Script

Act 1 Scene 1

FADE IN:

INT. BEDROOM. DAY.

BOBBI(15) has just woken up to the sound of her alarm clock. She looks at her phone and just lays there for a minute. As she starts to get undressed and dressed again for school, she hears her door creep open. JAIME, a skinny, ugly toothed boy walks in.

Bobbi

Why do you always ‘ave to come in my room when I’m clearly busy!? I’m tryna get ready for school cant a girl get any privacy round ‘ere!?

BOBBI goes to push JAIME out of her room but she isn’t strong enough, and he just laughs at her.

JAIME (Sarcastically)

Calm down Bobbi, I was only coming in to wish you luck for your first day. Hope your new uniform fits fatty.

JAIME walks off laughing, while BOBBI continues to get ready.

After she is dressed she goes to leave, when MIA, a small 3 year old girl clings on to BOBBI’s legs, as if she doesn’t want BOBBI to leave.

MIA (crying)

Bobbi, Bobbi don’t go.

Bobbi

Mia I ‘ave to go school don’t be stupid go play with your dolls or somethin’.

Mia

Why Bobbi always leavin’?

Bobbi ignores her and removes Mia’s small hands from her legs and shuts the door as she hears Mia crying.

 

 

 

 

ACT 1 Scene 2:

Fade in

INT. SCHOOL. DAY

MISS MORRIS (25) is welcoming BOBBI (15) to her new school and introduces BOBBI to AMIE.

 

MISS MORRIS calls AMIE over

 

AMIE (smiling and joking)

 

Watchya want miss?

 

MISS MORRIS

 

Well, this is Bobbi

 

BOBBI smiles shyly at AMIE, AMIE smiles back.

 

MISS MORRIS (bats her eyelashes)

 

Well, if you don’t mind, seen as though you are in the same year and Bobbi is new, maybe you could show her around the school?

 

AMIE (with a smile growing on her face)

 

Alright Miss, I don’t mind, just let me get my bag.

 

AMIE runs to the back of the classroom ad picks up her latest Pauls boutique bag.

 

AMIE (pats BOBBI lightly on the back)

Come on then, we can go to the English department first if you want?

 

BOBBI (shyly smiles back at AMIE)

 

Alright then.

 

 

 

 

ACT 1 Scene 3:

FADE IN:

INT. PLAYGROUND. DAY.

Its break time at school and AMIE (16) is sitting on a bench with BOBBI (15). AMIE is eating her monster munch crisp while BOBBI is eating a Greggs ham and cheese baguette.

AMIE (curiously)

So Bobbi, why did leave your old school?

Stuffing her face with crisps.