Proposal

Company Name:  Mosby Production

Contact Details: HAB Southwark Park Road, Bermondsey SE16 3TZ

Title of show: The Only Way is Bermondsey

Type of show: Mockumentary

Purpose of show: The purpose of our show is to entertain the audience, mock the documentary format and make fun of teenagers. Teens think their life is dramatic and interesting but chances are they are a little overdramatic and maybe too exaggerated.

Synopsis: The show follows the ups and downs of teenage life in Bermondsey. We will follow the turbulent life of teenagers in a typical Bermondsey school; we follow the characters Freya, Jessica and Emily who are the normal ‘nerdy’ called kids. Then the chavy girl characters called Bobbi, Amie and Chesney. The chavy boy names are Reiss, Liam and Aiden. Come and join us as we follow the groups adventures around Bermondsey; schools days, nights out, parental arguments and friendship disputes abound The Mockumentary will show the comparisons of all the different types of characters. There’s never a dull day in the typical Bermondsey School.

Target audience: teenagers and students People who are the same age as those who are characters in the show.

Script

Act 1 Scene 1

FADE IN:

INT. BEDROOM. DAY.

BOBBI(15) has just woken up to the sound of her alarm clock. She looks at her phone and just lays there for a minute. As she starts to get undressed and dressed again for school, she hears her door creep open. JAIME, a skinny, ugly toothed boy walks in.

Bobbi

Why do you always ‘ave to come in my room when I’m clearly busy!? I’m tryna get ready for school cant a girl get any privacy round ‘ere!?

BOBBI goes to push JAIME out of her room but she isn’t strong enough, and he just laughs at her.

JAIME (Sarcastically)

Calm down Bobbi, I was only coming in to wish you luck for your first day. Hope your new uniform fits fatty.

JAIME walks off laughing, while BOBBI continues to get ready.

After she is dressed she goes to leave, when MIA, a small 3 year old girl clings on to BOBBI’s legs, as if she doesn’t want BOBBI to leave.

MIA (crying)

Bobbi, Bobbi don’t go.

Bobbi

Mia I ‘ave to go school don’t be stupid go play with your dolls or somethin’.

Mia

Why Bobbi always leavin’?

Bobbi ignores her and removes Mia’s small hands from her legs and shuts the door as she hears Mia crying.

 

 

 

 

ACT 1 Scene 2:

Fade in

INT. SCHOOL. DAY

MISS MORRIS (25) is welcoming BOBBI (15) to her new school and introduces BOBBI to AMIE.

 

MISS MORRIS calls AMIE over

 

AMIE (smiling and joking)

 

Watchya want miss?

 

MISS MORRIS

 

Well, this is Bobbi

 

BOBBI smiles shyly at AMIE, AMIE smiles back.

 

MISS MORRIS (bats her eyelashes)

 

Well, if you don’t mind, seen as though you are in the same year and Bobbi is new, maybe you could show her around the school?

 

AMIE (with a smile growing on her face)

 

Alright Miss, I don’t mind, just let me get my bag.

 

AMIE runs to the back of the classroom ad picks up her latest Pauls boutique bag.

 

AMIE (pats BOBBI lightly on the back)

Come on then, we can go to the English department first if you want?

 

BOBBI (shyly smiles back at AMIE)

 

Alright then.

 

 

 

 

ACT 1 Scene 3:

FADE IN:

INT. PLAYGROUND. DAY.

Its break time at school and AMIE (16) is sitting on a bench with BOBBI (15). AMIE is eating her monster munch crisp while BOBBI is eating a Greggs ham and cheese baguette.

AMIE (curiously)

So Bobbi, why did leave your old school?

Stuffing her face with crisps.  

 

Finished Treatment

Act 1:

It’s the first day of school and Bobbi is new to Bermondsey Academy. Miss Morris gets a girl called Amie to show Bobbi around the school and how the things work there. Amie and Bobbi bond really well and decide to have lunch together when all of the sudden Bobbi starts rubbing her belly, not noticing what she’s doing when Amie makes a joke about Bobbi’s stomach, but Bobbi doesn’t laugh and Amie realises that she really is and she promises to keep this a secret. Unfortunately, Jay, a male student at HAB, overhears Bobbi and Amie’s private conversation, and spreads the news around the academy. He begins his rumour spreading by telling his girlfriend, Kelly, who then proceeds to tell the whole academy. Bobbi’s secret is out!

Act 2:

While Bobbi and Amie are sitting outside on a bench talking about their summer, neither of them know that Bobbi’s secret pregnancy has gotten around to nearly all of the school. All of a sudden Kelly mentions Bobbi being pregnant, and all hell breaks loose. Bobbi gets really angry and Bobbi walks over and raises her arm to slap Kelly but Kelly stops her hand and pushes her to the ground. Bobbi lies on the ground moaning in pain while rubbing her belly and Amie runs over to help her up but Bobbi just grunts in pain. Amie demands a teacher to call an ambulance as blood trickles form under Bobbi’s skirt.

Act 3:

Bobbi gets in an ambulance and is worried for her baby’s sake. Bobbi is resting in the hospital bed, when Dr. Marley enters and gives Bobbi the bad news. Bobbi has lost her baby. She starts to sob silently to herself as Amie enters the room, and after hearing the bad news she hugs her. Amie asks about the baby’s father, and how Bobbi fell pregnant, but Bobbie stays silent. After a long, silent minute, Bobbi decides she can trust Amie. Bobbie explains the fact that she lives in a foster home, because her parents left her when she was small. But at just 12 years old a foster carer, Jim, had started to treat Bobbi differently to the other children. She explains to Amie that Jim had touched her in ways a young girl shouldn’t be touched by a grown man. Amie looks shocked as Bobbi starts to break down in tears. Bobbi then tells Amie that she was sexually assaulted, and that is how she fell pregnant. Amie hugs Bobbi tightly, as Bobbi sinks in to her arms.

Treatment Draft 1

 

Act 1:

It’s the first day of and Bobbi is new to Bermondsey academy. Miss Morris gets a girl called Amie to show Bobbi around the school and how the things work there. Amie and Bobbi bond really well and decide to have lunch together when all of the sudden Bobbi starts rubbing her belly, not noticing what she’s doing when Amie asks her if she’s pregnant as a joke but Bobbi doesn’t laugh and Amie realises that she really is and she promises to keep this a secret. However a boy that goes to the school over hears this and tells his girlfriend Kelly that goes to the same class as Bobbi and she wants to stir things up.

Act 2:

Bobbi and Amie are sitting outside on a bench talking about their summer when all of a sudden Kelly mentions Bobbi’s weight. Bobbi gets really angry and Bobbi walks over and raises her arm to slap her but Kelly stops her hand and pushes her to the ground. Amie are sitting outside in the playground on a bench talking about their Bobbi lays on the ground moaning in pain while rubbing her belly and Amie runs over to help her up but she can’t as she grunts in pain. Amie calls a teacher to call an ambulance as blood trickles form under Bobbi’s skirt.

Act 3:

Bobbi gets in an ambulance and is worried for her babies’ sake. She’s lying in the hospital bed when a doctor comes in and tells her that she has lost the baby. She starts to sob silently to herself as Amie enters the room, and after hearing the bad news she hugs her. Amie asks about the baby’s father, Bobbie stays silent but after thinking for a while she decides she can trust Amie. Bobbie explains the fact that she lives in a foster home, and she was raped by one of the carers.

Compare the conventions used in documentaries and mockumentaries.

 

 

Shot variety and purpose.

In Summer Heights High, there are a variety of shot types used. For example they use close up and over the shoulder shots. We see this in the mockumentary when we get an insight into a private meeting with the students and a teacher in his office. This makes the audience think that the mockumentary is a real documentary because it is using the shots that a documentary would traditionally use. As an audience we feel special because it feels like we are witnessing an interview which is supposed to be private. Different shots are used because if they used the same shot the whole time, as an audience we wouldn’t be entertained.  Another shot that was used was the mid shot which focused on one person’s face while they were talking so that we are concentrating on the characters rather than what is in the background, they try to take away any distractions the audience may get. In The Tribe they use the same type of camera angles so that when the producers or directors want the audience to focus on a certain thing, they will use a certain shot so that the audience know what to look at. Because of what the tribe is about, they need to use close up shots, so the audience can focus on the detail of the bees.

Quality of footage.

Another device I am going to discuss is the quality of the footage. From watching Summer Heights High and The Tribe, there is a big difference in the quality of footage. In the documentary, ’The Tribe’, is HD. This is so that the audience can see every detail of the footage. You can tell that it has a high production value, and that it could have cost a bit more money to make sure the footage was perfect. However, the quality of the footage in the Mockumentary, ‘Summer Heights High’, wasn’t as good as the footage in the documentary. It is just normal budget quality. Documentaries and mockumentaries do not have the same quality of footage because documentaries weren’t always in HD, they used to be normal budget footage that no one wanted to watch, the mockumentary now has the budget footage that the documentary used to have, so that it can take the mick out of the documentaries. Another reason the mockumentary doesn’t have HD like documentaries is because if they had HD, it would look like it was planned, which ruins the whole idea of the mockumentaries.

Interviews and narrator.

The next device I am going to discuss is interviews and narrator. In summer heights high, we can hear the school children in the background to let the audience know that the interview took place in a proper school. We can also hear swearing from the interviewees. However we do not hear interviewer talking, we can only hear Jonah’s answers. This is so that we feel a connection with Jonah, and we feel we are a part of his group while he shows us round the school and lets us into his everyday life. Whereas if we did hear the interviewer talking, we would feel that we are being ignored, as he is getting in between the audiences connection with Jonah. In this interview, the school children speak slang, and he also swears a lot, this makes us feel that we are a part of his group, because if we were someone that he didn’t know, he would speak more formally. It also makes the audience laugh. In the tribe, we can hear the interviewer, Bruce Parry, a man talking in another language, and bees buzzing in the background. When Bruce uses pauses and fillers like ‘erm’, it shows us he is thinking about the right questions to ask.

Observational Shots

The fourth device I am going to analyse is observational shots. In the tribe, the shot type is an over the shoulder type to make us feel like we are part of the team. This shot type is also used to make the audience feel safe and protected by Bruce as he is standing in between us and danger. This makes the audience feel he is very brave. On the other hand, in summer heights high, there is an interview in the head teacher’s office, and we are looking in from a window as if we are a naughty school child peeking in to see what has happened. This also makes the audience feel special as we are seeing something no one else would usually see.

Voice Overs

The fifth device I am going to explore is voice overs. In the mockumentary the language used is informal slang, and sounds unplanned. For example “and stuff” shows that he feels that we are part of his “gang” because he can act informal and himself around us (the audience), however, if he thought that the audience were strangers, they would be more likely to use formal language. In the tribe, the narrator uses formal& descriptive language words which show that the target audience is more intelligent ad could be a bit older than those who watch the mockumentary. The point of having a narr